For a first novel it is pretty well done. There is a bit more telling, rather than showing, for my taste but writing is a craft that is learned over time. While I didn't mind alternating POV for Daniel and Hale I could have done without the POV chapters from Carol, Francine and "it". A lot of it was needless backstory that really didn't move the plot forward.
We're I editing this I would watch out for repetitive sentence beginnings. A least one chapter had almost every sentence starting with the word "I".
However, the concept of the story was a good one. The romance between the two heroes was a sweet one and the sex scenes were not too overdone. They nicely moved the relationship forward.
The characters were nicely developed and portrayed well. Though slow in spots, with the info dumps, I was caught up in the story by about 50 pages in and wanted to finish it.
The author needs a web site so I know what is coming next and when because I will be interested to see his talent develop.